Great Expectations: Chapter Nine quote response

I think what a long chain of iron and gold is, is that each chainlink represents a day. A gold day could be happy or brings good tidings, something like that. Iron is cruel and harsh, or maybe just a day that was filled with work or just was plain out bad. Flowers and thorns are a synonym for that, flowers being good days thorns being bad ones. But the first chainlink is something memorable, like the day Pip had in the story. When it says "this never would have bound you if, but for the formation of the first link of one memorable day." That last bit says if it hadn't been for the thing you did on that one day, your life wouldn't have been the same up to this point, or your future would have been altered. I think its saying your life is dependent on how you spend it and what you do.

Questions about a passage

My passage I found disconcerting (or at least one of them) was the one where Joe and Pip decide to go along with the cops to find criminals. First of all, there are many sentences that are very long and rambly, with huge words. When these complications are mixed together, it makes me read and not comprehend what am I reading. After reading a certain part like this, I then come back to a reality and when I look at the words on the page I am totally lost and do not know what has happened in the book or what is currently happening. So thats the first reason I don't understand this passage. The second reason is that I don't understand why Joe and Pip want to go hunt for criminals. They aren't cops, and plus there are many liabilities and dangers that could come up. It seems like extra work without anything in return. This passage starts on page 32 and kind of just carries on.

TIoBE Paragraph-Emery Miller

In my body paragraph, I have gone back and reworded to avoid repetition. Please tell me if you still think you hear some in it, also, I don't like the last transition, what would be a good one for that? Nothing else has changed, I just didn't want some words like "express to pop up a great deal (however it seems I have gotten rid of that one completely) You don't need to worry about the commentary because I didn't change any of it. And I'm really sorry I posted this so late!

By the way, how are we supposed to do the conclusion?